Post 8: Decisions and Revisions

Thought process: My original plan came from an idea about a man who was an alcoholic and he had a girlfriend, but something happens, which makes him change his life around. But it was more like making it up as I went along.

Feedback I got: Some people said they liked the sound of It, but it was said my original script didn’t really have a resolving ending. Then I got some feedback saying how I could change it to a proposal at the end, and this is where my idea came from for my new script.

I researched different ways people have proposed, so I could get a realistic idea of how my character Henry might do it. Then I watched a series of short films which shows people trying to propose, so I could get an idea of how Henry might act.

My basic plot outline is that Henry is living with his girlfriend Eileen, and he decides that it is time for him to propose to her, but he has terrible confidence issues, and doesn’t quite know how to do it. Every morning he wakes up and practices in the mirror of how he might say it. He attempts a few times, but each time he does it fails. So he goes back to basics, and decides to propose to her where they had their first date. But Henry is so nervous, he decides a drink might calm his nerves, the only problem is, is that he has to drive to this place, and he ends up having too much to drink. Whilst driving, Eileen finds out he had been drinking, and they have a fight. Henry is drunk, so he can’t concentrate on the road properly, and they end up crashing. A few weeks later, Henry is waiting for Eileen outside the hospital, and he is proposing to her, but we never get to hear her answer.

When we watched 'Signs', a short film, in class; I decided I wanted to base my character Henry around the character in this film. He shares a lot of the same qualities as him, they both have confidence issues, and both want to ask the girls they like an important question, but doesn't know how, and when to do it.

First draft of script: Turmoil

Latest draft of script: The Proposal




























































For my latest script 'The Proposal', I got the titles idea from 'Donnie Darko' who reminds us of a time, and how much time is left, but we don't know what's going to happen at that time. This is similar to the titles in my script, as the date and times are leading to the crash that leads Eileen in a critical condition. I decided to change the ending. Originally, I was going to have Eileen come out of the hospital escaping with minor injuries to find Henry proposing. But I feel that this ending is better, as it not only leaves tension for the audience, but leaves tension for the character Henry as well. I decided to end it on the note that Henry had wrote a few days ago, as it leaves tension for both the audience and Henry, this may also make the audience want to watch on to see her reaction.








Independent Research:




As well as getting inspiration from 'Donnie Darko', I researched into ways of proposing. I read many magazine articles to find realistic ways of proposing. Most top answers included having 'Marry Me' spelt out in rose petals, putting the ring in a glass of champagne and creating a webpage that their partner will see. This gave me my main idea's for the way Henry was to propse to Eileen.